“…You have worked hard to consolidate many of your ideas from the unit, responding to feedback and amending your work…” (OCA Tutor)
Yes. I am open to constructive and understandable criticism and always strive to improve my work.
“…It appears you have revised and expanded on some of your previous ideas and identified the main inspiration behind your practice. Whilst this has clearly been a positive exercise for you, in terms of the narrative flow of your reflection and research materials, there is scope to evidence more of your engagement with the thematic ideas you comment on and evaluate your final outcomes more rigorously in relation to your conceptual exploration …”(OCA Tutor)
“Some of the theoretical connections you draw on are poignant, such as Graham Harman’s philosophical investigation of allure, however, there is scope to develop your analysis of this term around the quotes you have included and review your final outcomes in light of what you understand and glean from these ideas …” (OCA Tutor)
“Barlow, Beuys and Noguchi, making some interesting observations and connections. This would benefit from a clearer underpinning of how these observations are connected, as it is currently over-generalised …” (OCA Tutor)
“it appears that you have strong bonds to the material approach of Barlow, so I suggest you build on these connections to strengthen your engagement with thematic ideas you perhaps share …” (OCA Tutor)
“I suggest you reflect on how you can engage, question and evoke conversation about these issues more specifically ‘through the work’, rather than assuming that the meaning is conveyed…” (OCA Tutor)
“Your exploration of form and materials has set up some sophisticated ideas and relates to some engaging contemporary commentary, yet there is scope to unpack the meaning and significance of this with more detailed reflection and evaluation of your theoretical framework. …” (OCA Tutor)
I will make the relevant changes.
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